Seen (Jane Parker) Trifextra Week Thirty-Two

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The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction.  She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be. Her salt-sting, demeaning husband never seemed to see her anymore. Today, she knew, he would.  Unlatching the third story window, Jane Parker stepped onto its edge and triumphantly threw herself into the dying sunset.

 

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Picture “lonely silence 2” shamelessly stolen from ~nerysoul on deviantart http://nerysoul.deviantart.com/art/lonely-silence2-142920557

Okay that was far more depressing than I intended.  But the original prompt was this weekend’s Trifextra challenge: add 33 words of your own to this:

“The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction.  She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.”

I didn’t quote it above, because I wanted it to just flow as one story. 

I’ll have you know I toyed with a post-apocalyptic London and a zombie thriller before deciding on this ending!!  I think the poor character was better off with this one…

Apologies to anyone that actually has the name of Jane Parker.  No resemblance intended.

Enjoy!

 

JMS

27 Comments

    1. And THAT is the moral of the story! haha, sadly I know there are far too many people in the world that suffer from depression, and sometimes it won’t let you see the other options. OOO, double meaning for Seen…hmm..

  1. No need for explanation. It stands on its own and very well. It’s so difficult to see the light at the end of a very long tunnel. Easier to see the end of a tough time. I like the word triumphantly, as if she finally found peace.

  2. Wow! You took my breath away with that ending! Nicely done! So sad, though.
    I wish she had pushed him out the window instead! Maybe one day someone will. 😉
    Seriously excellent piece!
    -Peace and light,
    Amy @BettyRants

  3. Awesome photo, dude, I don’t care if you stole it. And grim and gripping entry. LOVED it! That will show him. “Salt-sting” was brilliant! I post on here as “dunce two,” but it wouldn’t let me log in except through Facebook. But I had to comment. Winning stuff! Cheers!

    1. I will look you up! Thank you very much for the encouragement. “Salt-sting” was one of those things that kept replaying over and over in my head until I had to just DO it and write it in there somehow! Cheers!

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